http://g-esquared.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] g-esquared.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] ninoexchange 2012-06-22 12:15 am (UTC)

it's been some time since an ohmiya fic made me want to sob with joy like that, but holy crap, your words are beyond beautiful. i loved - everything about this, not kidding. the rest of arashi, everyone's body language, every kiss they had, and that sucker punch of a last line.

When they find each other’s lips again, it’s achingly, alarmingly romantic.
holy crap, not many people write like that, i can tell you. flshfd i just. ;____;

“I’ll quit,” Ohno offers.
taking the opportunity to say that your ohno is brilliant and your dialogue is a joy to read. and oh, man, this line.

“Sho-chan said that Leader said that Nino said that he didn’t want to be with him,” Aiba relays dutifully.
yup, i also love the group dynamic, no surprises there. this line makes me smile, because aaah aiba.

“Go away. Can't you see I’m busy wallowing? Despite what the rest of you seem to think, it’s not a group activity.”
BUT IT IS. ;_; it's such a group activity that we have a whole actual exchange for us to read about it!!

“Because you involved us. By using us as an excuse to run away from your feelings.”
this suddenly made a lot of sense, yay sho (:

Sho looks up at Nino, expression half-crazed “Baby,” he says.
HOW IS THIS LINE SO ADORABLE, GDI

“I love you,” Nino hears Ohno say. It’s only when Ohno sighs triumphantly against his lips that Nino realizes that Ohno wasn’t the one to say it at all. Nino hides his embarrassment with his tongue, presses his honesty into Ohno’s mouth so more of it won’t spill out.
just, gorgeous UTTERLY GORGEOUSSS

i'm sorry if this is more blathering than explaining why i love your writing, but, really. i always love nino/ohno but it doesn't always want to make me explode with joy and beauty like that. so there's that.

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